Saudações, eu sou novo por aqui, mas quis dar minha opinião sobre sua VN. É simplesmente incrível! [ALERTA DE SPOILER]
O fato de que a gente escolhe as decisões de mais de um personagem é realmente uma ideia muito interessante na minha opinião. Achei interessante também o fato do Nolan ser o deus da esperança e ser justo e compassivo, mas ao mesmo tempo estar perdendo sua própria esperança.
A história em si é realmente muito legal, sendo que pequenos detalhes podem significar muito logo para frente, como o fato de que a causa da morte de Nolan poderia despertar um ser cujo despertar está cada dia mais próximo. Eu achei criativo isso, já que há sinais de que o Monarca Perverso está próximo de despertar, mas os Duques acham que é a maldição que está perdendo força, quando na verdade é Nolan que está morrendo a cada dia por sua depressão. Eu imagino como Lux reagirá no futuro das próximas atualizações se de alguma forma ele descobrir que ele mesmo pode ser o responsável por essa tragédia.
A trilha sonora do jogo também é muito boa, eu consegui sentir o sentimento que elas transmitem e as imagens também são muito bem feitas. Eu também não posso deixar de comentar das cenas engraçadas, como a cena do banho com Nolan e Nicolai. Aquela cena me fez rir muito. Kkk
Enfim, o que eu quero dizer é que o jogo que vocês estão desenvolvendo realmente está muito bom, estou ansioso para as próximas atualizações! Meus parabéns a todos vocês por fazerem uma das poucas VNs em português e tão cheia de histórias. É muito raro achar VNs em português. Desculpa o tamanho do meu comentário, a propósito. Eu sempre falo muito. Kkk
Ah muito muito obrigado pelo o seu comentario e não se preocupe em escrever de mais, eu amo ler os comentarios de todos. Só peço desculpa pela a demora, eu estou agora em processo de planejar toda a VN para não ter mais uns furos de roteiro e coisas sem sentido. Obrigado pela sua paciencia!
Yes it is. If you follow my patreon you would receive some updates like new CGs sprites BGs and music. Im curreclty translating the game to english. Thanks for the question ^w^
By the way, I think it’s time for me to speak out about this novel, the author, get ready, because I will be unshakable and strict, like Nolan to Nikolai) I really liked this novel, especially how we are being prepared Nolan’s conversation with the dragon who wants everything to take him as a husband, I HIGHLY HOPE that you will not stop and will delight us with your short story!
Внимание, у кого не работает русский язык, после того, как вы его поставили, тыкайте в место, где была кнопка "start", начнётся история уже на языке, который вы выбрали и остаётся не забыть сделать сохранение, в дальнейшем ошибки этой не будет, если я не понятно объяснил, то дайте знать, я сделаю пояснение со скринами.
"Attention, for whom the Russian language does not work, after you put it, poke in the place where the "start" button was, the story will begin already in the language that you have chosen and it remains not to forget to save, in the future this error will not be , if I did not explain clearly, then let me know, I will make an explanation with screenshots."
I liked it. The communal bath scene with the back and forth of a first person narrative from Nolan's perspective to a first person narrative from Nicolai's perspective kinda gave me whiplash though.
Read it all and being honest,kinda left a weak impression. It feels more like an edgy self insert fic made by an inexperienced writer. Really hope not only that the writing gets better but that also Nolan gets some guts and becomes more independent
Also it doesn't help that the premise sounds a bit cliche and Nicolai,wich i assume is the main love interest,has a generic design and is shown to be your typical edgelord
Oof that's some hard feedback to read. This is my first time writing and sharing a story so I guess some rough edges are to be expected. The next update will include more insight into Nicolai's past and his motivations which hopefully elevate him above "edgelord" status. There is also a refinment of the earlier scenes such as between Nolan and Souldro in the hallway to better portray Nolan's inner turmoil.
Thanks for the review, it's a shame the story didn't resonate with you.
One thing I noticed was that in the scene where Nolan's crying, an instrumental version of the Hatsune Miku song "Rolling Girl" by WOWAKA was playing. I don't know if it was intentional, but if it was, nice touch :)
Two wrongs don't make a right. So we must find a balance and middle ground, somewhere we can move forwards. However, it not easy to accomplish when one is tuck between a rock and a hard place. How will we make BOTH sides see rationality? What shall happen if the balance tips too far one way or the other? Only time will tell, but sometimes messing up is part of helping to understand, so long as you keep an open mind. Even in the brightest dawn there is darkness, and even in darkest night there is light, but only when they are roughly equal do you have a means of agency.
I was wondering if you were referring to a specific moment in the story so far. I'm definitely keen for Criator exploring the story of ancient foes and those caught between them. Maybe everything isn't as clearly light/dark, just as you indicate. Nolan sees a light in Nicolai after all and Nolan is plagued by his own darkness perhaps.
Its a trope highly seen in many forms of media between rivaling groups/individuals, and a chronic one throughout history and present day. Just like "All that glitters isn't gold" (but our minds and hearts can shine far brighter), "Might makes right" (but do the ends justify the means?), "Don't judge a book by it cover" (Assume that your initial assumption may be wrong, does correlate a little to second chances), and the "Fear of unknown and change" (or keeping of status quo, if does not harm or restrict freedoms then it needs not be restricted). We all need to have have a leash to keep us from going to far (Anarchy/Chaos), but if its too short then we get (Rebellion from Oppression/Abuse of Power). In all cases though open communication is key, along with respect, responsibility, and trust. If all were to follow such keystones, then peace/world peace could be achieved. Even the golden rule can be a double edged sword if we do not know the motives of others, as good will between two, could be bad for others (Favoritism/Unequal Distribution).
You probably know a lot of this already, so I'm just rambling/preaching my observations, but complex and tangled situations often bring it out of me.
Look, the vn is about a heavy theme, mental health, and other things. Even if I find myself very horny, I dont know if there will be space for a nsfw. Im not saying that cant have one, Im just saying that I dont think there will be space for it. But we will only know if there be nsfw if I keep going writing.
Oh my god. I wasn't preparedn for such a masterpiece. To me, this game is SO intersting ! I want to play more ! I want to see the end of this, so many questions i'm asking to myself !
It's an amazing work. The characters are perfectly designed, their personalities are insanely well written, and the STORY ! Oh my god the STORY is amazing ! I mean, I feel like I'm following a suspense series, because it's not just the characters, it's the whole plot ! This is a work of art, I LOVED it, like A LOT. Thanks you for this amazing VN, I'll be on the lookout for any updates !
Once, again, thanks. I'd love to know if there is a discord server, or even a parteon/ko-fi so i can help you :D !
omg this looks really promising :OO i look forward to seeing more ^^! <3 (also you're a vocaloid/utau/vocal synth fan?!? the immaculate taste honestly)
Pera ae, Português!? É a primeira vez que vejo uma vn que tem opção de português natural até agora, todas tem no máximo japones além de inglês. Com certeza vou ler agora
ok, I read it and it was great i didnt expect the plot twist at the end tho, this would be a great story if both views of the characters would be used on the story telling, (my opinion)it would give great thril, excitement, and mystery to both the characters if oucomes would differ if a certain choice would be made... nice work looking forward to the next update :>
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When is the update?
I wonder what attitude Nolan and Nikolai
The relationship with each other is interesting, I hope it will all end and Interesting point. I will wait in Russian.
Saudações, eu sou novo por aqui, mas quis dar minha opinião sobre sua VN. É simplesmente incrível! [ALERTA DE SPOILER]
O fato de que a gente escolhe as decisões de mais de um personagem é realmente uma ideia muito interessante na minha opinião. Achei interessante também o fato do Nolan ser o deus da esperança e ser justo e compassivo, mas ao mesmo tempo estar perdendo sua própria esperança.
A história em si é realmente muito legal, sendo que pequenos detalhes podem significar muito logo para frente, como o fato de que a causa da morte de Nolan poderia despertar um ser cujo despertar está cada dia mais próximo. Eu achei criativo isso, já que há sinais de que o Monarca Perverso está próximo de despertar, mas os Duques acham que é a maldição que está perdendo força, quando na verdade é Nolan que está morrendo a cada dia por sua depressão. Eu imagino como Lux reagirá no futuro das próximas atualizações se de alguma forma ele descobrir que ele mesmo pode ser o responsável por essa tragédia.
A trilha sonora do jogo também é muito boa, eu consegui sentir o sentimento que elas transmitem e as imagens também são muito bem feitas. Eu também não posso deixar de comentar das cenas engraçadas, como a cena do banho com Nolan e Nicolai. Aquela cena me fez rir muito. Kkk
Enfim, o que eu quero dizer é que o jogo que vocês estão desenvolvendo realmente está muito bom, estou ansioso para as próximas atualizações! Meus parabéns a todos vocês por fazerem uma das poucas VNs em português e tão cheia de histórias. É muito raro achar VNs em português. Desculpa o tamanho do meu comentário, a propósito. Eu sempre falo muito. Kkk
Ah muito muito obrigado pelo o seu comentario e não se preocupe em escrever de mais, eu amo ler os comentarios de todos. Só peço desculpa pela a demora, eu estou agora em processo de planejar toda a VN para não ter mais uns furos de roteiro e coisas sem sentido. Obrigado pela sua paciencia!
Me sing "It been so long" while waiting the update
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Esse VN é incrível, simplesmente perfeito ÙwÚ
É um dos únicos com tradução para o português
Obrigado meu deus
This VN is incredible, just perfect ÙwÚ
It is one of the only ones with translation into PortugueseT
hanks God
hehe obrigado!
great VN with interesting story can't wait for more, and I wanted to ask will this VN have linear story or will this be put in routes?
Thanks :) and This will be a linear story with alternative endings
ok I really like Souldro's personality
Thanks! But we just getting more and more deep on the characters
I was on the fence about this but now I'm interested good work so far!
thanks! :3
Is game still alive?
Yes it is. If you follow my patreon you would receive some updates like new CGs sprites BGs and music. Im curreclty translating the game to english. Thanks for the question ^w^
I can’t say for sure about the translation error, because I solved it a time ago, I apologize for the uselessness in this matter
No problem
By the way, I think it’s time for me to speak out about this novel, the author, get ready, because I will be unshakable and strict, like Nolan to Nikolai) I really liked this novel, especially how we are being prepared Nolan’s conversation with the dragon who wants everything to take him as a husband, I HIGHLY HOPE that you will not stop and will delight us with your short story!
Thank you! DOn't worry, Im working on the vn Im just slow
Sorry, I wrote this for Russian speakers, because they personally have a bug with translation
But it got fixed with this update?
Внимание, у кого не работает русский язык, после того, как вы его поставили, тыкайте в место, где была кнопка "start", начнётся история уже на языке, который вы выбрали и остаётся не забыть сделать сохранение, в дальнейшем ошибки этой не будет, если я не понятно объяснил, то дайте знать, я сделаю пояснение со скринами.
Oh... English please X3
According to Google Translate it says
"Attention, for whom the Russian language does not work, after you put it, poke in the place where the "start" button was, the story will begin already in the language that you have chosen and it remains not to forget to save, in the future this error will not be , if I did not explain clearly, then let me know, I will make an explanation with screenshots."
Why the translation into Russian does not work?
It dont work? It should work, it was only to you that it isnt working?
So it is, when I select the Russian language in the settings, this happens.
Hmmmm I might know what is happening, lemme see here
"Here "- where exactly? what are you speaking about?
I said on my files X3, an expression. I updated the build you should able to play it without problems now (I hope)
I liked it. The communal bath scene with the back and forth of a first person narrative from Nolan's perspective to a first person narrative from Nicolai's perspective kinda gave me whiplash though.
Loved the update after awhile from Hiatus. Keep up the great work!
Thanks :D
Will the new update come out today?
In a few moments :D
where is the download for android?
Im sorry but happened a little bug that i had to delete the public version for android. Dont worry I will put it back when patreon release got public
cant wait for public update
You can pay 1 dolar or wait 2 weeks for it
Nice update!!
You already played it? :0
Weeeeell..
Not to lower your courage onto this game, i um i don't have patreon..
Buttttt!! I'm looking forward for future updates on public!!
Stay Safe!!
Fair X3
I will wait for this vn to update until the end of my life☺️☺️☺️
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA thank you orz
Read it all and being honest,kinda left a weak impression. It feels more like an edgy self insert fic made by an inexperienced writer. Really hope not only that the writing gets better but that also Nolan gets some guts and becomes more independent
Also it doesn't help that the premise sounds a bit cliche and Nicolai,wich i assume is the main love interest,has a generic design and is shown to be your typical edgelord
Oof that's some hard feedback to read. This is my first time writing and sharing a story so I guess some rough edges are to be expected. The next update will include more insight into Nicolai's past and his motivations which hopefully elevate him above "edgelord" status. There is also a refinment of the earlier scenes such as between Nolan and Souldro in the hallway to better portray Nolan's inner turmoil.
Thanks for the review, it's a shame the story didn't resonate with you.
when will be ubdates
Sorry if is taking so long to post the new update, Im working on it but real life stuff is making it complicated
in some future I will translate it into Spanish because I don't know English, that's why I translated the comment in google
One thing I noticed was that in the scene where Nolan's crying, an instrumental version of the Hatsune Miku song "Rolling Girl" by WOWAKA was playing. I don't know if it was intentional, but if it was, nice touch :)
That is intencional yes! Rolling Girl is my fav song of wowaka, and that song basicly define nolans (and mine) life as a whole
Two wrongs don't make a right. So we must find a balance and middle ground, somewhere we can move forwards. However, it not easy to accomplish when one is tuck between a rock and a hard place. How will we make BOTH sides see rationality? What shall happen if the balance tips too far one way or the other? Only time will tell, but sometimes messing up is part of helping to understand, so long as you keep an open mind. Even in the brightest dawn there is darkness, and even in darkest night there is light, but only when they are roughly equal do you have a means of agency.
We didnt understand it very well, but thanks for the comments anyway!
Its about the message(s) you are/will be trying to convey through the story.
I was wondering if you were referring to a specific moment in the story so far. I'm definitely keen for Criator exploring the story of ancient foes and those caught between them. Maybe everything isn't as clearly light/dark, just as you indicate. Nolan sees a light in Nicolai after all and Nolan is plagued by his own darkness perhaps.
Its a trope highly seen in many forms of media between rivaling groups/individuals, and a chronic one throughout history and present day. Just like "All that glitters isn't gold" (but our minds and hearts can shine far brighter), "Might makes right" (but do the ends justify the means?), "Don't judge a book by it cover" (Assume that your initial assumption may be wrong, does correlate a little to second chances), and the "Fear of unknown and change" (or keeping of status quo, if does not harm or restrict freedoms then it needs not be restricted). We all need to have have a leash to keep us from going to far (Anarchy/Chaos), but if its too short then we get (Rebellion from Oppression/Abuse of Power). In all cases though open communication is key, along with respect, responsibility, and trust. If all were to follow such keystones, then peace/world peace could be achieved. Even the golden rule can be a double edged sword if we do not know the motives of others, as good will between two, could be bad for others (Favoritism/Unequal Distribution).
You probably know a lot of this already, so I'm just rambling/preaching my observations, but complex and tangled situations often bring it out of me.
Such big text
But thanks!
I wonder where next update but im really exciting
Well good you ask, Im now making the sprites of the new build characters :D
Nice i can't wait
hey, just curious as i didnt see any mention of this in the comments, is there currently or will there ever be any NSFW content?
Look, the vn is about a heavy theme, mental health, and other things. Even if I find myself very horny, I dont know if there will be space for a nsfw. Im not saying that cant have one, Im just saying that I dont think there will be space for it. But we will only know if there be nsfw if I keep going writing.
When is the Next Update😭😭
Im curretly in a break. So be pacient
Can't wait for more Please More Update🙏🙏
Great VN! Can't wait for more!
Thx!
here! Have a cookie for the great game! Haven't enjoyed it since playing The Lone Wolf.
Thx!
is the android thing for the next update?
Wdym?
android textbox missing
Oh idk what is causing it, but for what i know that only happens on tablets
Looking forward to the next update.
That can take a while, Im on a break right now. When I return I will create a post
Oh my god. I wasn't preparedn for such a masterpiece. To me, this game is SO intersting ! I want to play more ! I want to see the end of this, so many questions i'm asking to myself !
It's an amazing work. The characters are perfectly designed, their personalities are insanely well written, and the STORY ! Oh my god the STORY is amazing ! I mean, I feel like I'm following a suspense series, because it's not just the characters, it's the whole plot ! This is a work of art, I LOVED it, like A LOT. Thanks you for this amazing VN, I'll be on the lookout for any updates !
Once, again, thanks. I'd love to know if there is a discord server, or even a parteon/ko-fi so i can help you :D !
omg thx QwQ
Gostei muito do jogo,mais o MC precisa ser mudado pq ele parece muito com uma criança
Tá
I cant read some things white text white background
like with souldro cant read some of that text cuz pants
I'm using Andriod btw (Edit: I don't think there's a text box in the android version)
Thank you for informing me! I will fix that asap
Waiting for the update is physically paining me😭
Hey lucky for you
I just finished the build and now Im curretly translating it
So stay tunned ;)
omg this looks really promising :OO i look forward to seeing more ^^! <3 (also you're a vocaloid/utau/vocal synth fan?!? the immaculate taste honestly)
Thx! Im working a lot on the next build almost everyday
And yes I make vocaloid/utau music too! :D
I already love it. I am new to you, and I hope to know more about you and your awesome work! Keep it up
Thx!
Pera ae, Português!? É a primeira vez que vejo uma vn que tem opção de português natural até agora, todas tem no máximo japones além de inglês. Com certeza vou ler agora
Sim sim tem em português. Tudo o que você precisa fazer é ir em preferencias e mudar a lingua
fresh blood to read :>
so exciting isn't it?
ok, I read it and it was great i didnt expect the plot twist at the end tho, this would be a great story if both views of the characters would be used on the story telling, (my opinion)it would give great thril, excitement, and mystery to both the characters if oucomes would differ if a certain choice would be made... nice work looking forward to the next update :>